Tuesday, February 1, 2011

Poem 76 - A Rainy Day

Thunder Clapped could hear it's angry noise
People had to scream to make others hear their voice
Brick floor now muddy and wet
Traffic was there, moans people let

Roads Crowded, people covered with umbrellas
Couldn't see much through fogged window glass
Noises, horns of vehicles, everywhere
The sounds no longer I could bare

Slowly sipped gulps of hot coffee
It was now comforting me
Under the quilt for a good evening's sleep
But in a few hours my alarm clock went "BEEP! BEEP! BEEP!"

Got out of bed put on my warm coat
Still water on the road, I sailed a paper boat
Ah! Now the rain had almost stopped
Roads were full, shoppers shopped
-Gaurang Rao


  1. Love this piece- especially sailing the paper boat! thanks.

  2. very visual and most appealing, nice poem.

  3. nice...love the sailing of the boat...i did that as a child...

  4. Nice use of imagery, and nice touch to focus on sound.

  5. You have strong images - thunder, rain, streets, mud and coffee which build to your conclusion. The sailing of the boat brings a peaceful conclusion to your early imagery acting as a metaphor for calm after a storm. Well constructed. You should be pleased with this poem. Thank you, Gay @beachanny

  6. ...fantastic imagery Gaurang.. always a delight to read...^^

  7. Lovely imagery, and the sailing the paper boat, especially caught my mind in the fun moments... nice magpie.

  8. Like the use of sensory info, line breaks, etc. Good piece.

  9. hey gaurang, congrats on this milestone achievement!

    reading this poem took me back to my childhood.

    keep it up and reach higher milestones.

    geetha aunty


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